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Billie Collins on the brain again--


I did not invite you here, Basho.
Though I appreciate that you
will not overstay your welcome.

You will be brief, succinct, and
in time, depart, and color my
evening in your departure.

I do not believe you would use up
all the guest towels, unlike
my uncle and his strange, loud, wife.

I think she was his wife. You would not
bring yours. Too many voices spoil
the pure sound of night's breeze.

Or it may only be that I remember you only
through a verse about an iron gate, and have
an unreasonably favorable impression,

and you would rather we traded rude jokes
about Mount Fuji, drank our sake warm,
and threw cherry blossoms into the dark air.

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squeakymaus
Nov. 17th, 2003 07:57 am (UTC)
RE: Billie Collins on the brain again--
Nifty. Now I need to look up who Billie Collins is.
spottylogic
Nov. 17th, 2003 02:15 pm (UTC)
Re: Billie Collins on the brain again--
Apparently misspelled--it may be Billy. Poet Laureate of the United States, and someone whom I occasionally try to imitate.
squeakymaus
Nov. 17th, 2003 07:22 pm (UTC)
Re: Billie Collins on the brain again--
Yep. Google showed me the way to his genius. I like his conversational tone and rhythm, the way he steps back from the overworked tropes of unrequited love or lust or the oppressive enui, and writes what people think about, in between the 'important' thoughts that they share with others. Damn you Spotty, as if I wasn't already far enough behind the 8-ball, now I have to go and buy books of poetry as well.
the_october
Nov. 17th, 2003 10:57 pm (UTC)
The bell is ringing.
A visitor is waiting
outside on the porch.

It seems impolite
to turn this poet away
but he eats too much

His cigars leave fumes
that linger in the sofa
and the dog hates him.

Spotty, if Basho
wishes to visit our house,
ask him to call first.

---

It may be cheating
to string several haiku
together, but hey.

At least they all have
the requisite number of
syllables, correct?

Oh, lest I forget,
the final line of this ought
to mention winter.
spottylogic
Nov. 18th, 2003 02:24 pm (UTC)
The bell is ringing.
A visitor is waiting
outside on the porch.

Yes, it is cold on the porch,
But do we have enough rice?

It seems impolite
to turn this poet away
but he eats too much

We have all dealt with rude guests,
but this man smells of old goat.

His cigars leave fumes
that linger in the sofa
and the dog hates him.

And who can blame the dog, if
even we would bark at him?

Spotty, if Basho
wishes to visit our house,
ask him to call first.
----

Hee, hee--I loved "And the dog hates him" :)
the_october
Nov. 18th, 2003 05:42 pm (UTC)
I think the stanza that ends with that line is, taken by itself, probably the most legitimately haiku-like expression of the sentiment. :D I like the line that even we would bark at him. :D :D
spottylogic
Nov. 18th, 2003 09:56 pm (UTC)
I think we'd both be executed by the Renga police if this was released to the general public ;)

Senryu are haiku-like forms that have humor, self-reference and the "I", and sometimes do things like:

Three lanes converged, but
Only two sets of stripes, and
skid marks, black as tar.
Shit.

adding an extra little fandangle at the end for "bang." I'll probably be corrected by a more learned haikuisto or -ista, but I'd deserve it.
the_october
Nov. 18th, 2003 11:59 pm (UTC)
If nothing else, for flagrant use of the word 'fandangle'. :D
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