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from HappyNews...

From a HappyNews article on eight-year-old kids raising monies to help fight cancer--from the "absurdity is where you find it" school of journalism--

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The cards were packaged up for sale and K.J. and Damien started going door to door in their own neighborhoods. They spent two hot summer months standing in front of local stores, knocking on doors, and even sold cards on the web. K.J. and Damien raised sold over 100 packages to raise $500 over the past two months.

When asked what they'd like to do in the future, both kids replied simultaneously and enthusiastically.

"Scientists!"
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And good luck to them :) It's an achievable goal...

Comments

spottylogic
Jul. 11th, 2005 12:13 pm (UTC)
Oh! They wanted to *be* scientists?

*checks verbs*

I guess that could be what the article was saying...
jerseytude
Jul. 11th, 2005 11:35 pm (UTC)
*sigh*

At the risk of getting fired, alot of the stuff that comes in is poorly written, and not in a journalistic style at all. That particular story was full of useful facts, but it read like stream-of-conciousness, so I edited it. Sometimes, you don't notice these things when you're desperately trying to shuck word count as quickly as possible. In this case, I trimmed a good 300 words off what ended up being a 200 word article. And kept all the facts.

I'm kind of proud of that no matter how I may have bungled the last sentence there. I just didn't even realize it till you pointed it out.
spottylogic
Jul. 12th, 2005 05:38 am (UTC)
It was a nice clean human interest story, and didn't ramble. And it *was* grammatically correct, just a bit suggestive--and it took another copy-editor to catch it. And it made me laugh at work, which is also important :)

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